My love for you,
Believe me is true.
My every tear,
Is shed for you my dear.
You may think that i lie,
But believe me when i die.
You will still be there in my heart,
As my soul's eternal part.
And till the very end, I will keep loving you,
Trust me, my love, what i say is true.
13 comments:
all i can say is
"heartfelt and obviously spontaneous"
:d
Cheers
CRD
yes it was spontaneous....
wrote it this very morning..in less than five minutes i guess....
no idea where it came from...thnx foh the comment though
not a very good one though, but since you say its spontaneous, i will accept it from you :)
Replying u line by line
E:My love for you,
Believe me is true.
S: Love is always true
My every tear,
Is shed for you my dear.
S: Love always is frm heart so little pain of heart directly effect to eyes and give so much tears
You may think that i lie,
But believe me when i die.
S; Love need sincierity and honesty the first piller of love is to trust and belive
without love we feel like soul less cuz love become soul
You will still be there in my heart,
As my soul's eternal part.
And till the very end, I will keep loving you,
S: as i comment above love is frm heart without them we feel soul less
we died but love never dies
Trust me, my love, what i say is true
S: same as u say
As my persobal experience
i live very far frm my love but she always live in my heart
i didnt talk her i cant see her physically
my heart always feeel her always see u
hmmm....@asbah
well frd....i noe its stupid....bt d problem is m nt a poet....m only trying something which i had never tried b4...
maybe someday ill come up with something u wont be reluctant to accept[:P]
thnx shabbir....foh giving so much of ur tym to a stupid poem :P
It is a stupid poem.
I like the idea behind the poem, but not the poem's structure. It sounds immature.
Consider this as constructive criticism. And try typing in free verse
@kaber
thnx...i agree it is.:P
free verse....maybe i would try it someday...
Nice effort. well done. Keep it up. :)
its not a stupid poem
its nice nd it has a deep background
I find it real sweet. It isn't stupid at all. Mark my words girl. Don't tag your feelings, stupid!
the ideas for love are same in every culture. but it seems ur impressed frm urdu or persian poetry and u just translated that...
i do same kinda poetry..
lol
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